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#1

Hei Leute;

ich habe auf Englisch ein Kommentar über die Gesellschaftslücke in unserer Gesellschaft :smile: geschrieben und wollte mal Fragen ob Ihr euch das mal durchlesen könnt nur mal durchlesen und schauen ob Ihr ein Fehler seht.
Wäre echt nett. Bin nicht so ein Überflieger in Englisch hoffe einige Englisch-Profis können mir helfen. :smiley:

Comment to the topic „generation gap“

How often parents or grandparents have said „The youth today“ or how many times we can not understand what the older ones have always against our style or with our music. And about this topic is my comment: There is a generation gap, and if so why.

It begins with the selection of clothes, we would prefer to have the clothes we liked and which belong to the current fashion. But how often our parents are against it and want to buy other clothes. Where we think „That’s OUT“. Or take another example: music. We young people prefer listening to pop or rap, but our parents find it terrible, but we also do not like their music, such as classical music. With Grandma and Grandpa that’s even worse. I think a generation gap exists. There are also similarities but there is a gap.

And Why? I think this gap is created simply by the changing times. How the fashion or the music changes so does changing our lives and our social orientation settings. Our parents were just another Educated and thus they see the world with different eyes. I think there will always be a gap.

Bitte wär TOLL !!!

#2

Hallo Antitofu,
habe derzeit keine Kapazitäten mehr frei, nur hier schnell ein paar Hinweise:

  • auf Punkt- bzw. Zeichensetzung achten
  • Widersprüchlichkeit vermeiden (z.B. Es besteht eine Generationslücke, und wenn dem so ist, warum?)
  • elder people have enjoyed a different education … mit Beispielen zu belegen — aber auch vielleicht eine unterschiedliche Erziehung? Die ist nicht ganz von der Hand zu weisen, siehe Antiautoritäre Erziehung, etc.

Hoffe, ich konnte noch ein paar Anreize geben :smile:
Beste Grüße,
Yvonne Hungler
Übersetzerin und Dozentin an der VHS

#3

Hallo!
Du fragst sehr lieb, weißt aber im Grunde selber, dass das den Rahmen von „werweisswas“ sprengt. Vielleicht findet sich wer, der das macht, ich habe für sowas aber keine Zeit.
Alles Gute! Dietlinde

#4

Leider ist mein Englisch nicht besser, so dass meine Korrekturlesung nichts bringen würde. Hoffentlich gibt es jemanden, der helfen kann.
Gruß
Hollandfreak

#5

Hallo Antitofu

Anbei meine Schnellkorrektur, nur überflogen, keine Garantie auf Auslassungen:

Comment on the topic „generation gap“

How often is it, that parents or grandparents have said „The youth of today“, or how many times can we not understand what the older ones always have against our style or our music. And about this topic is my comment: If there is a generation gap, and if so, why.

It begins with the selection of clothes. We would prefer to have the clothes we like and which belong to the current fashion. But how often are our parents against it and want to buy other clothes. While we think „That’s OUT“. Or take another example: music. We young people prefer listening to pop or rap, but our parents find it terrible, but we also do not like their music, such as classical music. With Grandma
and Grandpa that’s even worse. I think a generation gap
exists. There are also similarities, but there is a gap.

And why? I think this gap is created simply by the changing times. As the fashion or the music changes, so are our lives and our social orientation settings. Our parents were just educated differently and thus they see the world with different eyes. I think there will always be a gap.

Einige grobe Sachen entfernt und geändert.

greets,
Solanum

#6

Hi,

es war mir zu mühsam, den Text satzweise zu korrigieren.

Ich hab ihn deshalb nochmal mit meinen Worten geschrieben.

Das soll KEINE Vorlage für das Kopieren sein! Ich wollte damit nur zeigen, dass es sich lohnt, sich ein paar Vokabeln anzusehen (man kann sich ja deutsche Vokabeln leicht im Internet übersetzen lassen).

Der Text war so bereits verständlich und ich finde ihn inhaltlich auch sehr ansprechend.

MEIN Text soll - wie gesagt - nur als Anregung dienen, und ich würde dir auf jeden Fall empfehlen, möglichst auch weiterhin mit deinen Worten zu formulieren.

Siehe unten.

Grüße
Heinrich

How often did you hear parents or grandparents say „The youth today“?
How often do we wonder why the elder ones cannot appreciate our style or our music taste?
My comment regarding this topic is: There exists a generation gap.

I would like to explain why there exists such a gap.

It starts with the choice of clothing. We prefer clothes we like, clothes that are up to date, fashion style.
But often our parents dislike our clothes and would prefer to buy different ones, that are „out“ in our opinion.

Another example: music.

We, the young people, prefer to listen to Pop or Rap, but our parents find this terrible.
And the other way round we do not like their music either - such as classic music.
With Grandma and Grandpa it’s even worse.

Yes - the older generation and the newer generation have some things in common, but there
is also a generation gap.

But why is this so?

I think this gap is created by the change of times. Our lives and our social orientation changes
the same way the fashion or music changes.

Our parents were just educated in a different way und thus they see the world with different eyes.

In my opinion this gap will always exists.

#7

Hallo Antitofu,

im großen und ganzen Gut. Ich störe mich nur an dem Ausdruck „we would have the clothes we liked“
Ich würde hier eher schreiben we would have the clothes we like. Eben die Gegenwartsform von like und nicht die Vergangenheitsform.

Bei „That´s OUT“ eher "that´s OUT weil man ja eigentlich innerhalb des Satzes bleibt.

Über die Formulierung des letzten Satzes „Our parents were just another Educated“. Würde ich noch einmal nachdenken. Für mich liest sich das wie unsere Eltern wurden einander Ausgebildet/ Erzogen. Versuch den Satz zu übersetzen. Meine Eltern wurden anders erzogen.
Oder meine Eltern stammen aus einer anderen Zeit.

Ansonsten ist die kleine Erörterung O.k.
Weiterhin viel Erfolg.

Grüsse
steelstring

#8

Hallo, hier mein Vorschlag:
How often do parents and grandparents say „the youth of today - oh, my god!“? And quite as often we young people cannot understand why older people do not like our way to dress or our music. Let us begin with the selection of clothes. We prefer fashionable, stylish clothes. But very often our parents do not like this kind of clothes. They want us to wear different outfits that are old-fashioned in our opinion. Take another example: music. We young people prefer listening to pop or rap. Our parents, however, think this music is terrible. And we find our parents’ music horrible. And concerning Grandma and Grandpa it is even worse. I think there is a generation gap, indeed. We have many things in common but there are also great differences.
And what is the reason for this? I think there has always been a generation gap because the times have always been changing and along with them fashion, music, social structures and our whole lives. Our parents were just educated differently and thus look at the world from different points of view. I think there has always been a gap - and always will…
Gruß
B.

Bitte wär TOLL !!!

#9

Tut mir leid, ich habe gerade drei Klassenarbeiten auf dem Schreibtisch - keine Zeit!

Gruß
W.

#10

Hallo Antitofu,
ich hoffe, es haben sich weitere Personen gemeldet, aber hier kommen meine Vorschläge:
Comment on (nicht to) the „generation gap“

How often habe parents or grandpartens said „The youth of today“ or how many times have we not understood what older people have against our style or our music. Here is my comment on this topic: Is there a generation gap, and, if so, why?

…prefer to have the clothes we like… …But how often are our parents against them (the clothes)and want to buy other clothes, whereas we think „That’s OUT“. …
…How fashion or music changes, so do our lives and social orientation change. Our parents were educated differently and thus they see…

Ich hoffe, das hilft.
Holzbein

#11

zuviel Vorweihnachtsstress, sorry keine Zeit