Hallo zusammen,wer wäre so nett und würde mir mein
Motivationsschreiben für eine englische Uni durchlesen und wo nötig korrigieren?
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Kann ich gerne machen, kann aber je nach Umfang ein paar Tage dauern, habe die nächsten vier bis fünf Tage (Messebesuch) keine/kaum Zeit dafür.
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Tschüß,
Ferdi
Servus,
was spricht denn dagegen, das hier reinzukopieren?
Schöne Grüße
MM
Hallo,
habe keinen Text bekommen , obwohl ich auf Antwort geklickt habe. Sorry , hätte sonst gerne zu helfen versucht.
Hi! Danke für deine Antwort. Unten steht der Text… LG!
Dear Sir or Madame,
Hereby I apply for the MBA course of the University of Westminster.
I would like to enlarge my knowledge in business and gain a further qualification by studying a MBA at a University with such an outstanding reputation as the University of Westminster. The fact that it is named preferred MBA supplier to the UK Government and that it is accredited by the MBA Association emphasizes the excellent standing of this university.
Westminster University appealed to me as it works closely with professional organisations and businesses , thereby ensuring a practical approach alongside the given theoretical background. I am especially interested in the MBA Social Entrepreneurship module supported by the charity “The Great Generation” that you offer, where students have the possibility to put the acquired business knowledge into practice and at the same time carrying out charity work.
The module “International Business Negotiation is a further reason as to why I am attracted to the MBA of your university. After having worked at the international company Nestlé for four years I plan to work at an internationally operating company in the future again.
The mentoring programme that this MBA offers is a fact why this course stands out among other programmes. So far I have worked in Germany and Spain. It will help me a lot to gain an insight into British working practices by a senior professional.
A further reason as to why I am applying to study at Westminster University is its supportive environment as well as its good relations between students and professors. Through extensively researching your institution, not only by viewing your website, but also by asking current students via social networks, I have learned that Westminster University creates an excellent learning environment. The professors are specialists in their areas, not only providing excellent teaching but also accommodating the exact needs of the students.
I started to pursue an international career whilst studying “International Business” at the Business xxxx. As a result of this experience I was able to broaden my expertise in business. In addition I had the chance to strengthen my intercultural competencies and learn to speak Spanish fluently during my studies and internships in Spain. I started my professional career within the Sales Department of xxx AG. Currently I work as a xxx at Nestlé xxx GmbH. I am responsible for the management of four national customers of the German retail landscape. My main tasks are the preparation and execution of yearly negotiations.
In my free time I am engaged in social activities by being part of the association xxx. This organisation supports and coaches socially deprived children with a migration background. As I was born in Brazil I am aware of some of the obstacles children from other backgrounds may face when integrating. Therefore I want to be a role model for children of the next generation and help them to integrate themselves into German culture, benefit from its educational possibilities and thus help them to create career prospects.
Growing up in Germany with brazilian roots and having lived in Spain for two years I have had many opportunities to prove that I am able and more than willing to integrate myself into a new cultural environment.
I am looking for an adequate programme that prepares me for a high-level management position within an international company of the consumer goods industry. After the MBA I want to work as a Key Account Director. This position requires excellent leading and management skills. I am convinced that your MBA degree will lead me to achieving this aim. I am confident that my academic background, work experience and intercultural skills acquired while living abroad enable me to greatly contribute to your university. Furthermore I am looking forward to learning more about British culture and its people as well as its education system, which is highly renowned for its high standards I am convinced that a Master degree from University of Westminster will allow me to enhance my competitiveness within the employment market and will perfectly prepare me for my future career.
Please consider inviting me for an interview so I can further demonstrate my appropriateness for this course.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
also, lauter motivierte Leute, her mit dem Text 
… nach Möglichkeit schickst Du sogar nicht nur das Schreiben sondern auch Informationen
- an wen das Schreiben genau gerichtet ist
- was Du damit erreichen möchtest
- welchen Eindruck Du beim Leser erreichen möchtest
cheers, mat