Vortrag in Englisch

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#1

Hallo,
ich muss in der nächsten Zeit einen Vortrag in Englisch halten. Ich bin mir aber mit der Grammatik unsicher.
Wenn Sie Fehler sehen, korrigieren Sie mich bitte.

  1. I went to speak about my presentation in the English lesson – New York. 

  2. I chose this topic because I am wanted to find out more about the World.

  3. My aim was to show a little bit of New York.

  4. I wrote my plan of all the things I had to do.

  5. I found a lot of information on the Internet and in books from the school.

  6. I used pictures from the Internet and the school book.

  7. I downloaded a video from YouTube. 

  8. In the video were the streets of NY.

  9. I had some help with the English.

  10. My cousin lived in NY.

  11. But my presentation was more demanding, because I’m did everything alone.

  12. I needed 5 days to finish the work.

  13. The biggest problem was the video.

  14. It was too long for the lesson.

  15. So I looked for a new Video.

  16. I was happy when I had it done.

  17. Next time i would choose something less complicated.

  18. I think it was not my last presentation

  19. This was my presentation.

  20. I hope you like it.

Ich danke Ihnen im Voraus.

#2

Hallo,
inhaltlich zum Vortrag: Ganz ehrlich, das ist nicht sehr ansprechend. Ich verstehe auch nicht ganz, New York soll das Thema sein, aber es wird kaum erwähnt, sondern nur, wie du gearbeitet hast?!?
Egal, nun zur Sprache. Ich gehe davon aus, dass das ein zusammenhängender Text ist:
1.I wAnt to speak about my presentation in the English lesson – New York.
I chose this topic because I wanted to find out more about the world. (I am wanted = Ich werde gesucht)
My aim was (is?) to show a little bit of New York.
I wrote my plan of all the things I had to do.
I found a lot of information on the Internet and in books from the school.
I used pictures from the Internet and our text book.
I downloaded a video from YouTube.
The video shows the streets of NY.
I had some help with the English.
My cousin lived in NY. lebt er/sie noch dort? dann lives
But (warum but?) my presentation was more demanding (als welche andere? lass lieber das more weg), because I did everything on my own (alone).
I needed 5 days to finish the work.
The biggest problem was the video.
It was too long for the lesson.
So I looked for a new video.
I was happy when I had done it/finished it.
Next time I would choose something less complicated.
(But) I think it was not my last presentation
This was my presentation. (den Satz kannst du dir sparen! Lieber " Thanks for your attention" oder so)
I hope you like it.
Grüße
mitzisch

#3

Hallo,

Punkt 11 muss heißen because I did everything alone.

Freundlicher Gruß

R.Jahn

#4

Servus,

was spricht denn gegen die von mitzisch vorgeschlagene Alternative?

Schöne Grüße

MM